Evenfall
We sat by our lake,
Sumedha and I,
letting go thoughts
in ripples rapidly moving away from us
towards the Sunset.
Five lines I'm immensely proud of. Because they taught me that I can capture a moment into words, without providing context or explanation or detail. And I wouldn't lose anything of value; it would, in fact, be much more powerful this way.
Here's what it originally was:
(I wouldn't call this first draft. A zeroth draft perhaps, a scrawl of what I wished to put into them poem.)
Lake:
We found a lil' lake in our campus, Sumedha and I,
we walked around and inspected its (boundaries?)
The water was greenish but clear
then sat down at its banks,
legs dangling into the water.
We softly splashed the waters,
In the silence
creating thoughts and ripples
rapidly moving away from us.
I concentrated(?) on one ripple
The lake was still
It was I that was
moving away
somewhere serene and peaceful.
(when we headed back) to our hostel,
my companion smiled--
this shall be our secret.
Yes, I replied, this shall be our lake.
